Athletes Make Too Much Money Essay

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Topic: agree or disagree: professional athletes make too much money.

A huge amount people have animosity towards the fact that professional athletes make so much money annually. On the other hand teachers, soldiers, scientists and many other respected people, who make great contribution to our society, do not get paid much. So many people come to the conclusion that athletes do not deserve what they earn. However, the way I see it, salary does not define the intrinsic value of an occupation. Economically, professional athletes do deserve a fat pay check.

Firstly, professional athletes make huge income to the sports industry and the whole society. The sports industry is very unique because it can generate interest in so many aspects. A stadium can bring billions of dollars interest by selling tickets and endorsed sports gear like a star's jersey and signed sneakers. According to statistics, back in 1990s Michael Jordan alone brought more than 10 billion income to the economy annually. So now the fact that Michael Jordan earned several million a year does not seem absurd at all. Athletes are just like expensive products that make huge interest.

Besides, professional athletes are relatively scarcer compared to teachers, scientists and people in other professions. For example most of the people can make a good teacher when you put your mind into it. But rarely can one make a great athlete that the whole world would like to pay to see his performance. To be a professional athletes not only require hard work but talent and excellent physical conditions as well. Such as a person with average height can seldom become a good basketball play in the NBA. So the few people who make it good players deserve a high salary, say Allen Iverson and Nate Robinson. Thus professional athletes make great amount of money for their scarcity.

Admittedly, the entertainment that professional athletes provide us cannot compare to the scientific discoveries, good education, defense of the country in intrinsic value. Many people think money should be used in serious business for example to put into public health system. However, nowadays professional athletes do more than just play sports. They are respected as well because they donate huge amount money each year and they attend caring programs that help the development of the society. For example in the NBA Cares, players visit other countries like China to bring inspiration and encouragement. And the players also help with much community work. Using their reputation influential professional athletes make big difference to the community. Thus, professional athletes are doing a more valuable job than ever.

In conclusion, professional athletes deserve what they earn because they spur the economy with huge interest; they are scarce and they care about the society as much as others do.

A huge amount people have animosity towards the fact that professional athletes make so much money annually.


This is too wordy. Do people really feel animosity toward a fact? Or do they feel animosity because athletes are paid so much? Do they really care that it's so much money annually or are they angry simply because it's so much money?

Besides, professional athletes are relatively scarcer compared to teachers, scientists and people in other professions.


Because you say "compared to," the word you want is "scarce" rather than "scarcer."

In conclusion, professional athletes deserve what they earn because they spur the economy with huge interest; they are scarce and they care about the society as much as others do.


This ought to be punctuated differently:

In conclusion, professional athletes deserve what they earn because they spur the economy ; they are scarce; and they care about the society as much as others do.

However, your last point makes no sense. I care about society as much as anyone else. Does that mean I should make millions per year? Should every one who cares as much as anyone else make millions?

I know that this is a TOEFL essay, so the quality of the arguments isn't too important, but you might have explored the notion that athletes, like movie stars, make so much money not because they produce anything of great value, but because they produce something of very small value that they sell to millions of people.

As a Toefl writing essay this is enough. But I think you should draw your conclusion better than just they are scarce and they care about the society as much as others do.

Just remember, that once you start writing the TOEFL essay in the actual exam, you will have more than enough time (unless you're a slow writer). So once you get your idea down, go over the paper looking for grammer/spelling mistakes becaues it is just as if not, very important in a TOEFL essay.

I know because I did it last year :)

Thanks for the comment!
I tried to organize my idea more clearly and came up with this version. Is this better?
The reasons I give to this topic sounds a lot better in my head...I have trouble thinking in English. And when I try to translate the Chinese in my head the ideas I try to express are in Chinglish. I then tend to make a lot grammar mistakes. I don't know how to improve this.

A professional athlete can make several million dollars annually. Many people think that they are paid too much in that they create little value in the work. However, salary is not measured by the intrinsic value of a profession. A far as I'm concerned, professional athletes deserve what they earn.

Firstly, professional athletes make huge income to the sports industry and the whole society because they sell things to millions of people. The enormous demand makes the sports industry very unique. Nowadays, professional athletes have become an integral part of the economy. Millions of people want to see exciting sports and buy the memorabilia. A stadium can bring billions of dollars interest by selling tickets and endorsed sports gear like a star's jersey and signed sneakers. According to statistics, back in 1990s Michael Jordan alone brought more than 10 billion income to the economy. And he certainly deserves several millions of the money. So professional athletes do generate much more income in the economy relative to what they make.

Besides, professional athletes are relatively scarce compared to the huge demand. Most of the people can make a good teacher when you put your mind into it. But rarely can one make a great athlete that the whole world would like to pay to see his performance. To be a professional athletes not only require hard work but talent and excellent physical conditions as well. Such as a person with average height can seldom become a good basketball play in the NBA. Thus professional athletes make great amount of money in that millions of people want to pay for their scarcity.

Admittedly, the entertainment that professional athletes provide us cannot compare to the scientific discoveries, good education, defense of the country in intrinsic value. Many people think money should be used in serious business for example to put into public health system. However, the more you earn the more you tend to spend. The money that professional athletes make comes back to the economy in that they spend hundreds of thousands of money on luxuries. They contribute to a major part of the tax revenue. The money they make is indirectly used in many other aspects of our society. Thus professional athletes contribute to the development of the country.

In conclusion, not only do professional athletes provide us with exciting sports game but they spur the economy as well. They deserve what they earn.

hi
litingjiao

don't you think the first part is too long for the reader, i think you should accentuate accurately and quickly!

just in my point of view

litingjiao
You have a clear structure, and your idea is clearly stated. But it might be a little long for a TOEFL writing...because you can hardly write so many words in the test:]

Yeah, I know... I didn't finish this one within 30 minutes... I'm just practicing now and I hope I can get my ideas clear first. However, I'll try to come up with some short essays for the test.



  • A waste of time

    Even though I have enjoyed watching some sports, I can say, that it hasn't impacted my life at all in either a positive or negative way. If my team wins I'm happy for a little while, if they lose, it makes me upset for awhile. But it shouldn't make me upset at all because those feelings very quickly fade and fade even faster when my team wins. For example, most people couldn't tell you who won the Super Bowl 3 years ago or 10 years ago, etc. If it was important, most people would know these things. So are we saying we should throw billions of dollars towards something that is not important? If the NFL, NBA or MLB disappeared tomorrow the vast majority of people would be absolutely fine. Others may be a little sad for awhile but would soon find something else to occupy their time.

    On another note, the first comment in favor of high pay talked about it being so competitive that they deserve to make millions if they get there. I would argue that it is so competitive because millions of dollars can be made. I'd didn't use to be like this. For intance I spoke with a gentleman once that played football for GA Tech in the early fifties. He said they didn't even lift weights. And talking to other people like my father who played high school football and baseball in the early 70's, they didn't have near the amount of stringent time consuming activities that today's high school students do. And why is that, because there wasn't much to gain by pouring your whole life into it. That possibility exists now but unfortunately most pursing professional athletics will never make it, I believe it is a less than 1% success rate.

    This over emphasis on sports and entertainment has only been going on for about 50 years or so. In baseball I believe that Mickey mantle was the first one to sign for 100k per year and Nolan Ryan was the first to sign for 1 million. Now some of these guys sign for 25million a year, ridiculous. Especially if you look at how much time they are actually playing. A baseball player mainly stands there the whole game and I heard that the actual time that players are actually in motion during a football game is something like 20minutes. So if a football player is making 10 million a year he is making about 1.7 million an hour if you only count actual play time.

    Basically we are paying entertainers (athletes, actors, etc.) billions for very little work compared to the average working citizen and this is wrong and needs to change.

  • Yes i do

    Yes they do because they do spot that is not really benafishal to the world and they get paid 10s of millions of pounds. If they where a doctor that would not get that much money so i think that is wrong and they should have a pay cut ...

  • Yes they absolutely do.

    People work way harder than these athletes do, juggling work, children, lower wages, and the stress that comes with all of these. Even doctors have a hard life paying off all the student loans they have from medical school. I can't believe we even idolize these people because there are people who would sacrifice their own lives just to earn so little. Many of these athletes don't even care about their fans or even society. They're only in it for the money and that's it. They may be passionate about what they do but there is no beneficial outcome that society can gain from sports. People who actually deserve to be paid millions, Doctors, Teachers, and other well respected fields barely earn anything. In the end athletes are a bunch of egotistical maniacs that believe they are the ones who should be earning the money just because they "worked" hard by exercising and shooting balls into a basket, or hitting a ball with a stick. Yup, because that is very logical.

  • Cheap entertainment ruins other deserving professions

    Athletes pay:
    Football: 800,000 - 2,000,000 a year
    Baseball: 1,000,000 - 6,000,000 a year
    Basketball: 5.5 million a year
    NHL: 2.4 million a year

    This is the average pay for players in the following leagues in sports, all it is is cheap entertainment that people pay to enjoy and wrecks the salaries of those who deserve it more for doing HELPFUL things instead of making everyone act stupid and insane for a few hours.

    Deserving professions salaries:
    Doctors: 156,000 - 350,000 a year
    Teachers: 42,000 - 21,000 a year
    Firefighters: 42,000 a year
    Police: 42,000 - 53,000 a year
    Construction workers: 23,000-40,000 a yer

    The figures show very well, those who save lives and shape our futures get little amount of pay with the exception of most doctors. Lets also not forget the olympics, where some have spent billions to host the event than pay loads of money to those who win medals. This money should mainly be going to others.

  • Athletes are overpaid

    Fans keep up the demand, cannot even fathom that an athlete's salary in one week is twice their annual income. Society has put them on a pedestal, "heroes", who couldn't care less about the fans. They ignore requests for autographs, one actually heard saying, "Not my autograph. You will try to sell it and make a profit off my name". Are they kidding me? Who is trying to profit? The egos are ridiculous, uncalled for, and all they are good for is knocking up some woman that spread her legs for anyone with money. Or a porn mag.

  • They absolutely do.

    Athletes provide a service of entertainment to society. That is of lesser value, I think, than the people who educate our children or heal us when we are sick or injured. I do not think that athletes should be paid so much more than teachers or doctors, when all they are doing is playing a game. I understand that sports careers are not easy--but neither is teaching a child with a learning disability, or open heart surgery.

  • Athletes get paid to much money

    I think athletes get paid to much money because all they do is entertain for people. They get paid for entertaining. Yes the are famous but still millions are ridiculous. They think they are better than everybody else. It is Just wrong. It is about the money to them, most don't care about the people.

  • They are overpaid

    Yes, and it makes no sense because it's so competitive to get to the highest level that you would think the team owners can just get a "more affordable" player if some particular player gets too expensive. On the other hand there are sports that pay very little yet the sacrifice is enormous. So in the end the mainstream athletes should get less and the others more.

  • Very over paid

    The older I get the less I enjoy watching professional sports. Our country is collapsing though our athletes salaries are rising! Huh, tell me that makes since.. Athletes don't play for the love of the game and you can see that more today then in the passed! Over paid men tossing around balls!

  • Are you kidding?

    Are you kidding? People work way harder, are way smarter, contribute way more to society, and make less money than some pre madonna. However if idiots continue wasting their time and money on such soma's like watching other play around then they will continue to make too much money and our society will continue to have problems in actualizing its potential.

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